Wall-E

            Overall, I think I did a pretty good job in putting together my argument. I was able to use many varied sources and viewpoints in order to strengthen my argument and provide several takes on the issue. I think talking about the different types of learning and creating a link between the learning shift and technology use was a very important piece of my paper. By clearly illustrating these drastic effects that can obviously be seen, it helps to open the reader’s eye and see the true dangers of this practice. In most cases people do not listen or pay as much attention to an issue that does not have direct significance to their own life. Because of this fact, I made sure to cover the direct and immediate impact that this change will have and tell how exactly it is affecting people. If something is actually beginning to change in the way we think, people have a right to know and will hopefully find it alarming. This will in turn strengthen my own argument and help convince readers of the very real and evident future that lies ahead. I also tried very hard to depict just how bad the people aboard the ship were behaving and how unhuman they had really become. The severity of their dependence on technology is truly startling to me, so I figured that it would be to others as well. By painting a vivid picture of the possible gloomy future in store should this trend be continued, people are more likely to actually enact change and do something of use in this area.

            There are still, of course, weaknesses in my argument as well. One area that I wish I could have expanded on more was the many vast benefits of technology. Obviously technology is a very helpful and useful thing, or else it would not be used so much. This is an undeniable fact and I think that it could be touched on even more going forward. It is always very important, when constructing an argument, to examine both sides of the argument and see both benefits and drawbacks. This also makes you seem fairer as a writer, and not so incredibly biased toward the side of the issue you are arguing for. This helps give you credibility and the consequent increase in your ability to convince readers of your viewpoint. Going forward I will certainly look to find more stats and figures to demonstrate the positive aspects put forth by technology and how it has helped us progress as a whole.